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The map showcases the layout of the Chorleywood area Chorleywood area, a town close to London. From 1868 to 1994 the population has soared gradually in this region.

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Introduction
The map showcases the layout of the
Chorleywood
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area
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Chorleywood
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area
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, a town close to London. From 1868 to
1994
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 the population has soared gradually in
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 region.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, in
Chorleywood
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, there were fewer residents
througout
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throughout
 the 1868 -83
period
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 located in the west of
Chorleywood
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 park and golf course, represented by a blank
area
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. Afterwards, in
west
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, the
area
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 filled with straight lines represents
poplation
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population
 growth, from 1883 to 1922.
Dring
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During
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period
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, in 1909, a
railway
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 track was built alongside
Chorleywood
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railway
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 station. In the third spanning
period
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, 1922-70,
population
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the population
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 expanded in two locations showed in light shadded
area
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 on sothwest and in the south of
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Chorleywood
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the Chorleywood
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railway
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 track.
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, in the
fianl
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final
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period
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 a motorway line was introduced on the right-hand side.
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, during 1970 -94,
population
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the population
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 in
Chorleywood
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 village increased significantly and
based
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 in five locations on
northeast
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the northeast
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 and southeast corners, displayed in horizontal lines.
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, two main roads were
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 built, one
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railway
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the railway
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 track and
other
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the other
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 is junctun cross the
seond
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second
 road in
westnorth
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west-north
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Conclusion
To conclude
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, over the
period
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,
Chorleywood
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 town modernised with numerous infrastructural facilities,
as a result
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, many
peopple
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people
 decided to reside in
this
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 town.

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task response
Give a clear main view after the first sentence. Say that the town grew in stages and that new homes spread near the rail line and roads.
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Be more exact about the map. Do not say the blank part shows fewer people, as the map shows when the area was built, not the number of people.
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Cover each time area in a clear way: where new homes were built, what new transport was added, and how these were linked.
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Avoid ideas that are not shown on the map, such as people deciding to live there. Describe only the changes that can be seen.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: first say what the map shows, then give the main view, then describe the early and middle years, and end with the later years.
coherence and cohesion
Group details by time. Start with 1868–1883, then 1883–1922, then 1922–1970, and finally 1970–1994.
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Use clear link words such as “Next”, “By 1970”, “In the final period”, and “At the same time”. This will make the order easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sentences shorter. Some long sentences have too many ideas, so the meaning is hard to follow. Give one main change in each sentence.
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You include all four time periods and mention key new transport: the rail line, station, motorway, and main roads.
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You try to describe where growth took place, including the west, south-west, south, north-east, and south-east.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has an opening, a time-order body, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “Afterwards”, “Additionally”, and “Finally” help show the order of change.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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