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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

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The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The graph illustrates the proportion of individuals who consumed various types of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK between 2001 and 2008. Looking at the
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 for children increased relatively slightly . The
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 stood at 22
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 in 2001 and increased considerably , reaching 35
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 in 2006 .
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 by 2008. Turning to the men and children ,the figures stood at 17
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 and 12
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, respectively , in 2001 before rising steadily to
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 and 22
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 in 2006. They
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 slightly , reaching 24
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 and 19
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,respectively , by the end of
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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