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The process of producing drinking water by solar power powdered pump and filter. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The diagram illustrates the multi-step process of producing
water
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 via solar power using
pump
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a pump
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 and
filter
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a filter
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.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the process consists of different distinct stages to
completet
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complete
 it, beginning with the
elecricity
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electricity
 being generated and culminating in drinking
water
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 being produced and ready for use either by tap or container.
Body paragraph 2
In the initial step, the solar panel
expose
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 to enough sunlight to produce electricity,
then
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 after the electricity is generated
;
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,
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 it
is
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apply
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runs a long way through a tube that
connected
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is connected
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 to a converter.
Body paragraph 3
Following
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this
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, the electricity is generated all the way in
underground
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an underground
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 well attached to a pump.
Body paragraph 4
Water
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 in the pump
attached
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is attached
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 directly to a large tank above a wooden platform, the tank with two openings
in
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on
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 each side, one to
recieve
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receive
 the
water
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 and the other to produce it.
Conclusion
In the large opening next to the
water
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 tank cylinder, the
water
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 is produced into a rounded tube through a tap or a small
moveable
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movable
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 container.

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task response
Give a more correct overview. State that sunlight makes power, the power runs the pump, water goes from the well to the tank, and then the filter makes the water safe to drink.
task response
Report all main parts and links. The filter is not clearly described, and the path of the water after the tank is not clear. Do not add parts unless they are shown in the diagram.
task response
Use clear process words such as “is sent”, “is pumped”, “is stored”, and “is filtered”. This will help show what happens at each step.
coherence and cohesion
Put the steps in a clear order: solar panel and converter first, then pump and well, then tank, filter, and tap or container.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show time and order, such as “First”, “Next”, “After that”, and “Finally”. Avoid repeating “electricity is generated” when you mean that it is sent to another part.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence complete and easy to follow. For example, write “The solar panel is exposed to sunlight” instead of “the solar panel expose to enough sunlight”.
task response
You give an overview and identify the start and end of the process: power from the sun and drinking water for use.
task response
You mention key items such as the solar panel, converter, well, pump, tank, tap, and container.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer follows the general direction of the process from power generation to water use.
coherence and cohesion
You use some helpful linking words, including “Overall”, “In the initial step”, and “Following this”.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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