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The table illustrates the percentage of UK visitors to Spain in 1981 and 2015, categorized by different age groups.

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The table illustrates the percentage of UK visitors to Spain in 1981 and 2015, categorized by different age groups.
The given table compares the proportion of
aged
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age
 brackets of the UK visitors to Spain in two years (1981 and 2015).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 all figures showed an upward trajectory throughout the period, with the exception
those
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of those
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 in their mid-thirties to mid-forties and individuals in their mid-twenties to mid-thirties
that
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who
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 experienced a decline. It is
also
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 evident that young
professionals
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professional
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 visitors witnessed the most dramatic growth among the others. In detail, the share of
0
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the 0
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-15
age
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 group accounted for 10% in 1981, compared with 4% for
16
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the 16
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-24
.
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age group.
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However
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, both of these categories experienced an increase, to 12% for
0
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the 0
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-15
age
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 bracket by the end of the timeframe.
Similarly
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, those
who
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apply
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aged 16-24 rose by 11 percentage points, to 15%
making
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, making
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 it the highest
growths
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growth
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 by 2015.
Following
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this
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 trend, the remaining
age
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 groups were 25-35, 25-45, and over 55
,
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;
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 one out
three
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of three
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 showed an increase.
Meanwhile
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 the proportion of the 25-35
age
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 cohort stood at 50% by 1981, but
then
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this
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 figure declined moderately to 32% by the end of the timescale.
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, the fraction of the 35-45
age
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 group decreased slightly from 22% to 12% by 2015,
while
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 individuals over 55 grew steadily from 16% to 25%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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