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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention a
bag
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 I left on the plane, and I would really appreciate it if you could search for it. I vividly remember that at the plan, I put the
bag
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 in the cupboard.
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, when I got off the plane, I did not take it and left it there. The
bag
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 is quite compact, finished in jet black with red spots and a gold zip. It
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 contains my national identity card, my credit card, my license, and $2,000. More importantly, it involves a card, which enables me to participate in an international festival, which makes me extremely worried. I would be grateful if you could search for it and informe of the
bag
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's contents. I would
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 appreciate it if you could send it to the Green Hotel, located in the City Centre. My room number is
also
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 206. Thank you for your consideration and time. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil.

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task response
Give key flight details, such as the flight number, date, seat number, and time. This will help the airline find the bag.
task response
Say more clearly why the card is important and ask the airline to contact you as soon as they find the bag.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: what happened, what the bag looks like, and what you want. Keep this order.
coherence and cohesion
Use short, clear links between ideas. For example, use “After that” instead of repeating “which” in one long sentence.
coherence and cohesion
Put the hotel name, place, and room number in one short part so the reader can find the return address quickly.
task response
You explain the problem, describe the bag and its things, and say what you want the airline to do.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and ending are polite and right for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has one clear job, so the letter is easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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