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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
From the chart,we can see that
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 people
domaniten
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donate
 to charity by
36
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the 36
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- 50
group
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 is highest in 1990, and by
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group
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the
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 51-65
is
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group is
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 the highest in 2010
,
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however
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,
whatever,
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apply
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the
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group 18-25
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18- 25 group
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 was
least
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the least
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 in
1990
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both 1990
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 and 2010. In 1990,the
group
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 26-35 was equal
as
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 above 65years old,around 31%,the
group
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 51-65 was
secondary
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the secondary
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 range,
compare
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compared
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 with the highest
group
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,
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. By
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by contrast
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 ,the gounger domanition was least
,approximately
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dominance,approximately
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 17% in 1990.
compare
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 with
1990s
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the 1990s
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,the
domanation
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donation
 to charity
was
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apply
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decreased in 2010,except for two groups,from
51yeasrs
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51 years
 old to above 65 years old,51-65 years old population
giving
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, giving
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 money was highest in 2010(39%)
,the
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 range of age 36-50 same as the
group
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 of age above 65,both are 35%. In
summarise
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summary
,the
domanation
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dominant
 population in 1990
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was
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more than
population
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the population
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 rate in 2010.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charitable donations
  • age range/bracket/group
  • percentage (%)
  • 20-year period
  • British people
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • significant change
  • donation patterns
  • remained stable
  • highest/lowest
  • observe
  • compare
  • summarize
  • comment on
  • relevant features
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