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You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - describe the public event - explain why you think he/she would like the event - tell him/her about the other activities you can do

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Hi Mike, I hope you are doing well. I am writing for you to make
announcement
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 that I am going
to
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back home in Viet Nam for
Lunar
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the Lunar
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 New
Year
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 in February. As you know, that occasion is considered the most important traditional event in Vietnamese culture. So I think it will be wonderful if you have a chance to fly back and join
in with
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us. First of all, in Lunar New
Year
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, people
is made
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 a lot of special foods
such
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 as sticky green
beans
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bean
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 rice, fish sauce with pork,... For a person who has a great passionate with asian food,
I
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 pretty sure that you would love it so much.
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, spring is the most beautiful time of the
year
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. The weather is warmer and it
covered
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 by hundreds kind of flowers. One more
things
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 is that it has so many activities
outdoor
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outdoors
 for
New
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the New
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Year
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 that you could participate in. The most popular is firework in New
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Year
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Year's
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 Eve. Do not hesitate to let me know your
thought
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, so we can arrange more details
our
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 schedule. Hope to get back to you soon. Best wishes.

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task response
Say more about the event, such as where it will be, how long it will last, and what people do there. This will make your invite more clear.
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Give a clearer plan for the other things you can do together, for example visit family, see a flower show, or go to a market.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words such as “First”, “Also”, and “Finally”. Keep each main point in its own paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Some sentences are hard to follow. Use short, clear sentences and check word order, for example: “I am writing to tell you that I am going back to Viet Nam...”
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You invite your friend in a warm way and explain why the Lunar New Year is important to you.
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You give good reasons why your friend may enjoy the food, flowers, and fireworks.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, main part, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use separate paragraphs for food and other things to do, which helps the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public event
  • cultural festival
  • annual celebration
  • local traditions
  • live performances
  • traditional music
  • food stalls
  • street parade
  • open-air concert
  • a lively atmosphere
  • taste regional dishes
  • experience the local culture
  • meet local people
  • take memorable photos
  • visit historic sites
  • explore the city centre
  • browse local markets
  • plan the itinerary
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