You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter - describe the public event - explain why you think he/she would like the event - tell him/her about the other activities you can do

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Dear James, I hope you are well. How is everything going? Do you have plans next week? I want to invite you and Cami to the annual festival in my hometown.
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festival celebrates the independence day
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and the foundation of the capital city, Bogota.
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, there is a
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at 7 pm in the justice palace, after that,
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drone show and fireworks at midnight, followed by a carnival for 3 days long. I know that you guys will love it because
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really colourful,
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shining
, fun, and lively. And believe
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it is an experience out of
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world.
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, as you are professional dancers,
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pretty sure you can participate as part of the official dance crew, so, if you come, they can pay you to do what you like, dance.
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, is there a new singer
everyday
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, which attract a lot of people.
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year, One
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is coming to perform their 3rd album. I know that you are his fan, so let me know if you are
comming
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coming
to arrange everything. Best wishes, Dani

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task response
Say more about the event, such as the date, place, and what people do there. Make the plan for James and Cami more clear.
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Add other things you can do together, not only the festival. For example, you can visit old parts of Bogota, try local food, or see places in the city.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Use short, clear links such as “First”, “Then”, and “Also” to make the plan easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences have many ideas. Break them into two or three short sentences. This will make your meaning more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Check small grammar points that can stop the flow, such as “it is”, “I am pretty sure”, “shining”, “coming”, and “a singer every day”.
task response
You invite your friend in a warm way and give good reasons why he and Cami may like the event, such as the dance and the music.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting, questions at the start, and friendly closing make the letter feel natural and kind.
coherence and cohesion
Each main part has a clear focus: the event, why they may like it, and the music.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

Topic Vocabulary:
  • public event
  • cultural festival
  • annual celebration
  • local traditions
  • live performances
  • traditional music
  • food stalls
  • street parade
  • open-air concert
  • a lively atmosphere
  • taste regional dishes
  • experience the local culture
  • meet local people
  • take memorable photos
  • visit historic sites
  • explore the city centre
  • browse local markets
  • plan the itinerary
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