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The line graph below shows the percentage of spending in Turkey, from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph below shows the percentage of spending in Turkey, from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information on how the
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 changed.
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 food, leisure, clothing, transportation, and energy.
Thus
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, all views have significant points.
Hence
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, the units are shown in percentages.
Overall
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,
according to
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 the main reports, in terms of the main information, food has the highest
percentage
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.
However
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, energy has the lowest
percentage
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.
Thus
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, both views have significant changes On the one hand, in terms of the highest
number
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,
according to
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 the given information,
according to
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 the main report,
according to
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 the primary changes, food has the highest
number
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 at almost 35%.
However
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, leisure has the lowest
number
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 at almost 20%.
In addition
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, the percentages decrease dramatically.
On the other hand
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, in terms of the lowest value,
according to
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 the given data,
according to
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 the main report,
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according
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 to the secondary changes, transport has the lowest
percentage
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 at about 3%.
However
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, clothing has the highest
percentage
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 at about 95%.
Moreover
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, the values increase significantly.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, however, thus".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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