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The graph below shows the percentage of people in a European country reporting high levels of anxiety, by age group, from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the percentage of people in a European country reporting high levels of anxiety, by age group, from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph provides key information about the percentage of people reporting high anxiety levels by age
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 from 2000 to 2020. The units are measured in percentage.
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, it is clear from the figure that the 16-24
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 had the maximum percentage compared to others. The 65+ age
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 had a steady
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decrease
 over the period,
whereas
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 the 25-34
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 had increased slightly.
According to
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 what is shown, from 2010 to 2020, both adult groups from 16 to 24 and 25-34 years old
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increased sharply, nearly 20%.
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 in 2000, the 50-64
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 rose from around 1%, but it had decreased from 16% to nearly 13% over the years. In terms of the 35-49
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, from 2000 to 2010, it had been up and down in the range from 13% and 16%.
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, from 2010, it started
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, rising from approximately 15% to 17%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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