the chart below the total number of minutes (in billions ) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

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the chart below the total number of minutes (in billions ) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The bar chart illustrates the total figure of minutes spent on telephone calls in the UK and categorised
in
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three types between 1995 and 2002.
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, the local
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fixed
line
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counted for the highest,
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the mobile calls ranked as the lowest throughout the time
but
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after a
steadily
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increase, rose sharply.
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, the national and international
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fixed
line
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raised gratually. The local fixed -
line
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was the highest among the two other lines, just over 70
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billions
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billion
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in 1995. Which reached
to
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its peak in 1998
below
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at below
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90
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billions
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billion
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and at
exact
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number of 90
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billions
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billion
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in 1999 before declining to over 70
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billions
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billion
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in 2002.
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, the mobiles (all calls )
was
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were
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the
lowes
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lowest
at just approximately 5
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billions
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billion
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in 1995, which
raised
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rose
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steadily until 1999 at about 12
billions
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that leaded to its highest peak
to
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nearly 45
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billions
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billion
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in 2002.
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, national and
internationa
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international
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fixed
line
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experinced
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experienced
a steady increase over
the
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time from about 38
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billions
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billion
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in 1995 to approximately 60
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billions
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billion
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in both 2001 and 2002.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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