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The bar chart below shows the value (in billions of pounds) of Southland's exports in three key industries (international tourism, dairy products, and meat) for the years 2000 and 2025, with projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the value (in billions of pounds) of Southland's exports in three key industries (international tourism, dairy products, and meat) for the years 2000 and 2025, with projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares three main industries'
export
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 values in the Southland region for the years 2000 and 2020, which
also
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 predict future projections for 2025.
Overall
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, international
tourism
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 was the highest
export
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 income in 2000, and its number will increase steadily until 2025. In 2020, Dairy
products
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 were the main
export
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 items; their
value
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 was higher than that of international
tourism
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. Meat
products
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 have earned the lowest
export
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 figures since 2000. International
tourism
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's
export
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 income increased from around 8
billion
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pounds
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 to almost 9
billion
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 of pound between 2000 and 2020, and it will gradually rise to approximately 10
billion
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pounds
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 in 2025.
By contrast
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, dairy
products
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'
export
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value
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 was slightly lower than international
tourism
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 in 2000, just over 7
billion
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 of pound.
However
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, it is the highest
export
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 income
this
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 year, earning almost 10
billion
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pounds
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, but the
value
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 will slightly decrease to approximately 9.5
billion
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 in 2025, and it will be a little lower than the
value
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 of international
tourism
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 will produce. Meat
products
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 show a gradual decrease; their figure drops from 6
billion
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 to nearly 5.5
billion
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pounds
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 between 2000 and 2020, and their
value
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 will decrease to 5
billion
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 in 2025. Those numbers are much lower than the numbers of the other two categories.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, tourism, products, value, billion, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export revenue
  • key industries
  • the value of exports
  • in billions of pounds
  • overall trend
  • account for
  • the highest figure
  • the lowest figure
  • show a steady increase
  • rise considerably
  • grow rapidly
  • remain relatively stable
  • experience a slight change
  • be projected to increase
  • be expected to overtake
  • a marked difference
  • the gap between
  • by comparison
  • respectively
  • the forecast period
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