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Band 6.5

Something in your rented apartment is not working properly. Write to your landlord. Describe the problem. Explain how it affects you. Request a repair.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the generator not working properly.
First,
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the generator does not work consistently for about three of the six hours, and the problem is that cables number two and three are cut.
Second,
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it provides little electricity for laundry, reading, and entertainment on TV. Specifically, from 10:00pm to 1:00 am.
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, I would appreciate it if you could deal with
this
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 matter as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Saif

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task response
Describe the problem more clearly. Say where the cut cables are and when the generator stops.
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Explain the effect on your daily life in more detail. For example, say that you cannot wash clothes, read at night, or use the TV.
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Make your request more clear. Ask the landlord to send a worker to fix or change the cables soon.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. Link the ideas more smoothly with words such as “As a result” and “Therefore”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep time details clear. The line about “three of the six hours” and “from 10:00 pm to 1:00 am” is hard to understand together.
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You state the main problem and ask for a repair.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow because you use short paragraphs and clear order words.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and fit a formal letter.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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