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You are participating in an online discussion for language learners. The question is: "Should university education be free for everyone?" Post your response, giving reasons and examples. Write 180-200 words.

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Introduction
I strongly believe that
the
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apply
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university
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education
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need
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needs
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 to stay with
current
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the current
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 occasion. If
university
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would be
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were
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 free for
everyone
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everyone,
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 it
causes
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would cause
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 some problems.
Body paragraph 1
First of all, it brings financial difficulties for
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university
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the university
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 government to stay stable in funding. It seems
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university
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universities
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 need more money for better
facilitates
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facilities
 than they
don't
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can
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 afford to provide modern appliances
caused by low-income
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due to low income
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.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, Free
education
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lead
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leads
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 to
be
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being
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 unappreciative by students.
unless They
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Unless they
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 pay to study,
They
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they
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 don't faithfully study at the
university
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. And it increases unskilled
employes
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employees
 in society.
As a result
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, A lot of fields might face problems
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in looking
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 for
workforces
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workforce
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Body paragraph 3
In my
view
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view,
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 the government should only implement free
education
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 at the
university
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 for low-income families. It helps to support people in need to
socialize
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socialise
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 with others.
Conclusion
To sum up
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,
university
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education
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 should not be free for everyone, but the
government does
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government's support
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 for poor families can be helpful.

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task response
Answer the question clearly from the start. Your view is clear: free university for all may cause problems, but poor families should get help.
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Develop each main point more. Explain how free study would make schools short of money, and say what may happen to teachers, rooms, books, or tools.
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Add one real or clear example. For example, a poor student could get free study, while other students pay part of the cost.
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Write 180 to 200 words. This post is much shorter than the asked length, so your ideas need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear order: state your view, give two reasons, give your plan for poor families, and end with your view again.
coherence and cohesion
Your linking words help the reader: “First of all”, “On the other hand”, “As a result”, and “To sum up”. Use them with full, clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main idea. The first body paragraph can be about money for schools. The next can be about how students may value their study.
coherence and cohesion
Make the last sentence clearer. You can write: “University should not be free for everyone, but the government should help students from poor families.”
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You give a clear opinion and do not change your main view.
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You offer a fair middle plan: free university for students from poor families.
coherence and cohesion
Your post has a beginning, main points, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You use several linking words to show the order of your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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