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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

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The bar chart illustrates the top ten
countries
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 in
production
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 and
electricity
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consumption
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 in the year of 2014.
Overall
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, these
countries
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 exhibited different values in the given period,
while
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 China maintained the highest figure compared with the Republic of Korea.
However
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, the difference among these
countries
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 is considered relatively high. As the chart showed, China was the highest in both categories, 5,398
kWh
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 for
production
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 and 5,322 for
consumption
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. The
production
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 of the United States was 4,099
kWh
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 , and its
consumption
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 of energy was 3,866.
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, Russian
production
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 reached 1,057, whilst 1,038
kWh
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 was the
electricity
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consumption
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.
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 the country of Japan produced 936.2
kWh
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 of energy,
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 it consumed 856.7
kWh
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 of
electricity
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.
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, the remaining six
countries
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 were much lower than China and the United States, whilst the range of
electricity
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production
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 was from 871
kWh
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 to 485.1
kWh
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.
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, their maximum
consumption
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 was 698.8, and the minimum was 449.5
kWh
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, production, electricity, consumption, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • top 10 countries
  • production
  • consumption
  • overview
  • compare
  • significance
  • data
  • electricity
  • regional differences
  • factors
  • influence
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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