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The line graph below shows the average annual amount of single-use plastic consumed per person (in kilograms) in four different countries (The Netherlands, Singapore, Brazil and Australia) between 1980 and 2040.

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The line graph below shows the average annual amount of single-use plastic consumed per person (in kilograms) in four different countries (The Netherlands, Singapore, Brazil and Australia) between 1980 and 2040.
The line chart demonstrates the amount of single-use plastic consumed per individual annually in 
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, Singapore,
Brazil
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 and Australia over six decades and a prediction for the future, between 1980 and 2040.
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, it can be seen that people's consumption of single-use plastic in Singapore increased significantly
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 it will continue to increase. In 
Brazil
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 and 
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the Netherlands
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Netherlands
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Netherlands,
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 the consumption per person fluctuated, and it will decrease
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in the future. In terms of Singapore and
Brazil
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, in 1980, the amount of single-use plastic consumed per individual was just under 10
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 figure saw a substantial rise to 60 
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 in 2020, and it will rise substantially
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 years, reaching approximately 135 
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 in 2040. The amount per person in
Brazil
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 was around 30 
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 in the first year, it doubled in 2020, and it
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 to increase slightly to just over 60 
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 in 2040. Regarding the remaining countries, people in 
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 consumed more than any other
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, numbering 90 
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 in the first year.
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 figure peaked in 1990 with 100, before it dropped to 60 
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, and it is predicted to reach nearly 30 
kilograms
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 in the final year. The average consumption per person in Australia reached 100 
kilograms
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 in 1990.
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 figure will stand at 20 
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 in 2040.

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