While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

Good employees are very important for any companies. They represent the company and share
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opinion about the company outlook to the outside world. It is very important to recruit
people
with a point of view for frictionless running for any company. The employee needs to find some balance between personal
qualities
, qualification and knowledge. I agree both of these components are important. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why both of these components are important, but the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that
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hare
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erson which is grumpy, rude, play unfair despite, that employee
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a hight
education
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and big
job
experience
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people
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team,
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tmosphere in
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study says
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this
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Communication
skills
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is
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contact with customers. Nobody
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make shopping in shops, or enjoy
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the dinner in
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estaurant, where
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ave a
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people
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skills
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On the other hand
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skills
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experience
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education
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ilot, it is necessary to have
experience
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education
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have personal
qualities
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contact with passengers and other team members, but in case of some emergency situation, personal
qualities
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enough
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education
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the emergency procedure and extensive pilot
experience
. In summary, both components are important on different
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types of jobs. For specialists' jobs
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experience
and
education
play a
first
plan role,
however
, for occupations related to personal contact, social
skills
is a crucial element.
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