While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

Good employees are very important for any companies. They represent the company and share
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opinion about the company outlook to the outside world. It is very important to recruit
people
with a point of view for frictionless running for any company. The employee needs to find some balance between personal
qualities
, qualification and knowledge. I agree both of these components are important. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why both of these components are important, but the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that
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hare
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erson which is grumpy, rude, play unfair despite, that employee
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a hight
education
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and big
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experience
. When
people
have that kind of person in
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study says
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this
is the master reason why
people
now often change
job
.
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skills
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is
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contact with customers. Nobody
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make shopping in shops, or enjoy
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the dinner in
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estaurant, where
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ave a
job
people
with lacking social
skills
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, there are many occupations that do require social
skills
,
experience
and
education
.
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ilot, it is necessary to have
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,
education
and
also
have personal
qualities
. Personal
qualities
are important when they have
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contact with passengers and other team members, but in case of some emergency situation, personal
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enought
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. That time, most important is
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about how the
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the emergency procedure and extensive pilot
experience
. In summary, both components are important on different
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types of jobs. For specialists' jobs
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experience
and
education
play a
first
plan role,
however
, for occupations related to personal contact, social
skills
is a crucial element.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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