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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
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Good employees are very important for any companies. They represent the company and share
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opinion about the company outlook to the outside world. It is very important to recruit
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 with a point of view for frictionless running for any company. The employee needs to find some balance between personal
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, qualification and knowledge. I agree both of these components are important. At the outset, there are numerous reasons why both of these components are important, but the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that
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erson which is grumpy, rude, play unfair despite, that employee
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 a hight
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 and big
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experience
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 have that kind of person in
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team,
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tmosphere in
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ob is taff.
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 is the master reason why
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Comunnication
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Communication
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contact with customers. Nobody
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make shopping in shops, or enjoy
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the dinner in
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estaurant, where
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ave a
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 with lacking social
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, there are many occupations that do require social
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 and
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ilot, it is necessary to have
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. Personal
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 are important when they have
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contact with passengers and other team members, but in case of some emergency situation, personal
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isn't
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enought
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. That time, most important is
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 about how the
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aeroplane
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 the emergency procedure and extensive pilot
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. In summary, both components are important on different
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types of jobs. For specialists' jobs
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experience
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 is a crucial element.
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