With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

n
Suggestion
N
the present day world, an increasing number of people opt fast
food
over homely meals. Fast
food
outlets like KFC, Pizza
Hut etc
Accept comma addition
Hut, etc.
Hut etc.
has become
Suggestion
have become
commonplace in almost every nook and corner of the world.
Thus
, people find it convenient to replace home-cooked
traditional
Suggestion
Traditional
dishes with junk
food
.In my opinion,
this
development has more negative effects than positive. There are countless hazards that are brought in by fast
food
.
First
, eating a regular diet of processed
food
is the main cause for
obesity
Suggestion
Obesity
.
This
increase in body mass
make
Suggestion
makes
our body prone to lifestyle disorders like increased blood glucose, pressure and cholesterol levels.It will in turn
deteriorate
Suggestion
Deteriorate
our health and may even lead us to depression.
Thus it
Accept comma addition
Thus, it
is evident that dining out regularly would negatively affect out physical and mental
helath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heath
.
Furthermore
, as people turn away from traditional dishes, they would soon
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
its significance.
This
will lead to decrease of diversity of various
indegenous
originating where it is found
indigenous
endogenous
dishes
Suggestion
Dishes
.
Moreover
, eating out on a regular basis creates
financial burden
Suggestion
a financial burden
as well.
However
, we cannot forget the ease of getting delicious
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
cuisine
from eateries. It would be a joyous
experince
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
for a person to dine out with
near
not far distant in time or space or degree or circumstances
Near
ones once in a while. In
adition
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
,
this
would
also
help us to taste
cusines
the practice or manner of preparing food or the food so prepared
cuisines
cousins
from different part of the world. In conclusion, fast
food
if consumed on a regular basis would lead to serious health concerns. Even though junk
food
is delicious and easily available
it
Suggestion
It
would replace traditional dishes and would cause
addition
being abnormally tolerant to and dependent on something that is psychologically or physically habit-forming (especially alcohol or narcotic drugs)
addiction
as well.
Thus
, the hazardous
effecs
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
are prevalent over positive aspects.

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