In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

Across the world there are many countries where people with advanced
degrees
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Degrees
are struggling to find employment. I think
this
is because full-time employment is no longer the cornerstone of modern economies. Universities need to re-structure study options in order to keep abreast of
this
development. People often declare that there is no work around anymore. In fact, there is
plenty
a full supply
Plenty
of work. Casual, on-call, contract, part-time and temporary positions have proliferated in recent years. What is much rarer now is permanent employment, meaning positions with a long-term contract, benefits, stability, internal promotion and skills development organised by employers. The problem is that the university education system was designed for an
employment
Suggestion
Employment
-centred economy. People would dedicate anything from five to seven years to diligent study in order to get a guaranteed career at the end of it. There is no guarantee anymore. The solution is for university education to accommodate new working
arrangements
Suggestion
Arrangements
. Study options need to be broken down into shorter “booster” qualifications taken on an as-needed basis with more part-time, evening and distance options. A more realistic scenario now is for workers to balance two separate income streams while studying on the side – perhaps for the length of their working life – rather than studying full-time for six years and
then
working full-time until retirement. The post-employment economy is only a problem for people who are not
prepared
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Prepared
for it.
Unfortunately many
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Unfortunately, many
of these people are highly-qualified graduates who are the product of an antiquated education system.
Revamping university study
Suggestion
The revamping university study
should resolve
this
issue.

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