Some people think that it is best to save money for example in a bank or savings schemes. Other people feel that money should be spent whenever it is available, discuss these views and reach an opinion on this debate.

People have different views about whether it is a smart choice to spend
money
immediately or
money
should be saved in a bank or savings schemes. While some people want to
favor
promote over another
favour
spending
money
as soon as they earn it, I would argue that it is more beneficial to save
money
as much as you can in case of emergency. On the one hand, people have a variety of reasons to justify their decision of spending
money
quickly.
Firstly
, it is inevitable to spend the sizable proportion of their disposal income on purchasing the daily necessities
such
as food, drinks, grocery and clothes.
As a result
, their salary has
beeb
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
used up and there is nothing left to save, especially in case of low-income groups.
Secondly
, the consumption of goods and services is one of the important indicators of the prosperity of a country.
Therefore
, spending
money
on these products and service is a worthwhile activity.
On the other hand
, it
seeems
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
seems
seams
to me that the benefits of saving
money
are greater than the drawbacks. The
first
advantage is that people could be well assured about their life if they have
savings
Suggestion
saved
money
in their bank account.
For example
, unexpected events
such
as accidents, illnesses, unemployment or bankruptcy may happen randomly without being noticed. In these cases, having
large amount
Suggestion
a large amount
large amounts
of
money
available in the bank can save one's life from hardship, especially in the ever-changing economic situation.
Furthermore
, reckless spending results in many serious consequences as people buy unnecessary items which are advertised
agressively
in an aggressive manner
aggressively
on the internet. In conclusion, I concur with those who agree with the view that it is wiser to save
money
wherever possible for the future use.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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