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some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. other people think that, subjects like technology and science are more important than history Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have differing opinions with
regarding
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regard
regards
 to the question of whether
history
 or science and
technology
 subjects are more crucial in various school subjects. In my point of view, I believe that one of them could have a vital aspect.
This
 essay would to discuss and give some examples to reinforce my view. It is undeniable that
history
subject
 can be seen as the main
subject
 in some schools.
This
subject
 brings
the vast
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the vastness
 of knowledge about background, conventional
culture even
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culture, even
 lifestyle in another nation that could be described in every single period. Viet Nam is the perfect example in
this
 circumstance,
history
subject
 play as a force
subject
 in most of school and university. As a consequence, the student could respect and thankful for the sacrifice of seniors. The development of
technology
 over the world lead to
technology
 and science subjects should to encourage and become a critical
subject
 in school. An increase in competition for
technology
such
 as artificial intelligence and virtual reality in each country make to
technology
 in education
also
 develop. Annually, there are many of international rewards for outstanding scientists, one of the reputation
reward
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rewards
is
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are
 Nobel. To sum up, both of
history
 and
technology
 are an important
subject
 and help to widen the knowledge of students.
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