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Some people argue that girls and boys should be educated separately, while others think that it is more advantageous for children to study at the same school. What is your opinion?

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It is believed that children should go to mixed-
sex
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school
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 while the opponents think that it is better to teach schoolboys and schoolgirls independently. From my
perpective
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
prospective
, I truly believe that the connection between students in
school
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 age in all genders bring about vital merits. On the one hand, co-education is beneficial in many ways.
First
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,
this
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 can improve the contact between males and females in in numerous aspects.
In particular
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, when students have
team
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teamed
-working tasks, boys and girls may learn how to assign duties which suite their
sex
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 characteristics,
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 as boys tend to undertake physical-required tasks
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 as carrying heavy learning materials.
In addition
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, children may become more competitive when boys and girls study together,
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 they can make the grade in their academic performance.
Furthermore
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, going to two-gender schools may
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
 a better harmony atmosphere between pupils because they could balance extreme attitudes of their counterparts as well as they have chances to experience anniversaries together
such
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 as day of
man
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a man
 and woman.
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, basing on
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 trait, students are encouraged in forming sound sentiment and virtue.
On the other hand
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, going to
single
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a single sex school
sex
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school
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 may be less effective.
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,
this
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 kind of education could lack of balance of
sex
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 nature and does not fit social model.
This
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may leads
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may lead
 to long detrimental impacts on
psycology
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the psychology
psychology
 and
physiology of students
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physiology students
.
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, the boys could be unduly naughty and kick up a dust in the class while the girls may tend to be too bitchy when a group of them are studying jointly.
Secondly
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,
chilren
a young person of either sex
children
 could accept gender pattern which
are shaped
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is shaped
 in single
sex
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school
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.
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, they seem do not know how to react with males in the future situations, and
this
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may causes
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may cause
 hardships and challenges which they ought to face in their relations. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I fully support the view that children should go to mixed-
sex
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school
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instead
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 of teaching boys and girls separately.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Co-educational system
  • Social development
  • Gender equality
  • Psychological impacts
  • Collaborative skills
  • Diversity of opinions
  • Comprehensive social development
  • Equal access to resources
  • Educational environment
  • Distractions
  • Real-world scenarios
  • Academic advantages
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