Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree that
art
related subjects are important for the development of children.
However
, it does not mean that we should add these courses into syllabus for high
school
students as other compulsory subjects as will now be
discuss
Suggestion
discussed
. It is true that
art
subjects have profound impacts on a child's development. Studying
art
courses enrich their soul and spiritual life. My younger sister, a twelfth grade student, told me that painting lessons help her see life in different angles and relax after studying other difficult subjects in
school
. In high
school
, students have to
study
compulsory subjects
such
as economics, computer science which may lead to employment prospects, but life would meaningless if we just spend all our time for working. Despite of
above arguments
Suggestion
the above arguments
, I believe that
art
subjects should be optional in high
school
. In compulsory curriculum, students have to
study
many difficult subjects and they
also
have to spend time on other outdoor activities. If we add
art
courses as a mandatory subject, students have to
study
harder. The more compulsory subjects, the more pressure for students.
In addition
, some students do not have any talent at drawing, that would be
pity
Suggestion
a pity
when they
study
for hours but they cannot create a work of
art
.
Therefore
, studying
art
courses put more pressure on their shoulder and waste time for studying other important subjects. In conclusion, I do not agree that
art
subjects should be required for high
school
students
Accept comma addition
students, although
although
they
are have
Suggestion
have
many advantages like other compulsory subjects.

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