The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of usage of different features of the mobile phone
in to
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into
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seven categories for three specific
years
; 2006, 2008 and 2010. About all
the
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apply
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people
used
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who used
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the phone for making calls. The
second
highest ratio was of sending and receiving messages that
was
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were
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in around
70s
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the 70s
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and rose by
few
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a few
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percentages over the
years
. around 70% of the population used it to capture pictures and the percentages increased in the subsequent
years
by just a few
percent
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per cent
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. the phone was
also
used to browse the internet; data for 2006 was not found, but it was 41% in the year 2008 which
also
doubled to 73% in 2010. 12% of the individuals used it to play music in 2006 and
this
ratio remained
same
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the same
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in the following
years
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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