The graphs show percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the proportion of usage of different features of the mobile phone

in to

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into

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seven categories for three specific

years

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; 2006, 2008 and 2010. About all

the

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apply

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people

used

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who used

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the phone for making calls. The

second

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highest ratio was of sending and receiving messages that

was

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were

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in around

70s

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the 70s

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and rose by

few

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a few

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percentages over the

years

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. around 70% of the population used it to capture pictures and the percentages increased in the subsequent

years

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by just a few

percent

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per cent

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. the phone was

also

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used to browse the internet; data for 2006 was not found, but it was 41% in the year 2008 which

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doubled to 73% in 2010. 12% of the individuals used it to play music in 2006 and

this

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ratio remained

same

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the same

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in the following

years

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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3
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

<4

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

132 words

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