In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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It has been observed that girls are much more inclined towards artistic and creative endeavours than boys who generally tend to be inclined towards scientific pursuits.
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generalisation holds true for both genders as a whole but cannot be held true for each individual person.
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example there
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example, there
are many male artists, and in
feilds
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
fields
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as beauty
,
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,
nursing and teaching which are considered female dominated have male participation.
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Similarly one
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Similarly, one
can find women engineers. Each person has its own interests and inclinations based on their abilities and background. How much the genders affect their choices is up for debate. Scientists with
background
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a background
backgrounds
in hard sciences like psychologists argue with
emperical
derived from experiment and observation rather than theory
empirical
data that biological sex has a huge role to play in determining people's
choices but
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choices, but
the sociologists suggest that gender is
an
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a
socially constructed phenomenon and roles and behaviours of males and females are enforced by the society which
compells
force somebody to do something
compels
boys and girls to
chose
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choose
differently. The answers may lie in how our biology evolved. It has been observed that females have taken the roles of
caregivers
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. As
caregivers women
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caregivers, women
often pursue professions like nursing or teaching. Another reason may be physical strength, the professions that involve
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lots
of physical
efforts
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effort
like coal mining are not
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
to most women as they are less competent in
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area due to their biology. Men
on the other hand
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have taken the roles of exploration and hunting to provide for their family.
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led to scientific thinking and
indsutrialisation
the development of industry on an extensive scale
industrialisation
which explains
boys interest
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the boys' interest
boys' interest
boy's interest
in the
scietific
of or relating to the practice of science
scientific
domain. I think that individual freedom to
chose
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choose
and equality of opportunity should be given to both sexes and merit should be the sole factor for what profession one pursues.
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trend is not alarming and in sync with biology
therefore
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much will not be
acheived
to gain with effort
achieved
trying to reverse it.
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