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Some countries spend lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

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Nowadays, the world is suffering from
traffic
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 congestion. To eradicate
this
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 problem, many countries spent a huge amount of money for the easier use of
bicycle
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bicycles
the bicycle
. In my opinion, Yes,
bicycles
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bicycle
 use is the best solution. As it reduces
traffic
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 and accidents and
moreover
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, they are environmentally friendly. To embark upon,
highway
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 accidents and
traffic
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 flow problems are the major issues of any countries in the world. Driving vehicles on a high speeds leads to accidents. People drive at a high speed to reach quickly to their destination, but a small miss calculation on the way results
into
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in
 accidents. One clear example, In India approximately 8
highway
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 accidents happen daily. The usage of automobiles
are
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is
 more and more due to which there is so much stream of
traffic
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 on roads. Especially, during peak hours.
Traffic
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 issue can be reduced by the usages of cycles daily. The space which automobile occupy, Bicycles do not. The space which two vehicles
occupies
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occupy
 on
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highway
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the highway
a highway
highways
, it can easily replace by the more than eight bicycles.
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, As cycles
needs
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need
 less space than it can ride on a bicycle lane and other loaded trucks can drive a clear path on
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highway
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the highway
.
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, speed limit of bicycles is very less
as a result
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, there would not be any road accidents. Bicycles do not release harmful smoke like other vehicles they are environmentally friendly. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that for a healthy life for a citizen. Government should spend a good amount for the comfortable use of bicycles as they reduce major road accidents and
traffic
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 jams and
furthermore
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, they are the best solution in term of keeping environment clear and healthy.

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