The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
bar chart represents the total number of
trips
that children aged 5 - 12 made to and from
school
in 1990 and
in
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2010. As can be seen from the chart, over time the predominant method of commuting to
school
has changed from walking to being driven in a
car
. In 1990, over 12
millions
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of
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trips
made to and from
school
was
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done on foot, followed by
bus
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, cycling, a combination of walking and
bus
, and
finally
travelling by
car
as the least popular method of commuting. There
was
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only over 4
millions
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of
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trips
by
car
in
this
period.
However
, in 2010,
by contrast
, around 11
millions
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of
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car
trips
were made to and from
school
, rendering
this
method of travelling the most popular, followed by walking,
bus
, a combination of walking and
bus
, and
then
cycling.
Overall
, it can be concluded that there will be more
trips
made by
car
in the future as the use of
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car
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is increasing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, school, car, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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