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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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Most of the modern employers hire
mostly
Suggestion
most
 experienced workers rather than people who have academic knowledge about the certain field that
employer’s need
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the employer’s need
employer’s needs
. If
this
 hiring method will continue soon there will be no need for formal certificates, qualification and so on.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 partly agree with
this
 statement because even if workers have
experience
 they may not have general knowledge about their field. Hiring mostly experienced workers might
cause
 some problems.
For example
, unemployment.
But how
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But, how
 hiring experienced workers can
cause
 unemployment? The answer is
this
 method can prevent new generation workers
such
 as school or college graduated students to find a
job
 that suits them. Because that
job
 might require
experience
 and to gain
experience
 they should find
job
Suggestion
a job
.
This
 paradox
cause
 unemployment in some countries. So to not
cause
this
 problem most
employer
Suggestion
employers
 hire candidates with good qualification too. But even good formal qualification doesn’t always mean that these people know their
job
 and most of them learn about it while working rather than studying. So it’ll take some time to teach them while people who already had
experience
 doesn’t need
learning
Suggestion
to learn
 and they could start working
straightaway
Suggestion
straight away
. In conclusion, I should say that there should be places for beginners and experts.
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