The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

The role of women in modern society has changed and it is a good in some way.
For instance
, they have
same rights
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the same rights
as man; they have right to vote and work.
However
, some people believe that
this
change could increase juvenile-related problems because in past
ages women
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ages, women
ages women's
ages women's women's
role was nurturing
child
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children
a child
the child
and taking
care
of
house
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the house
a house
. Today woman after school or university has to find
job
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jobs
because getting support from family is not an option in many families. So, they have to work before they get married or keep working after marriage to raise a
child
and build a house because of modern financial pressure. Even in recent years women was
have
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having
to quit their jobs to devote to their time to taking
care
of their
child
. But it is not
an
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a
general rule and there is a lot of professional
child
care
facilities and nurseries. But
this
mean parents have to
spent
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spend
more money because most of
this
child
care
facilities are expensive. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
must say that in my life I saw many mothers who worked and take
care
of their
child
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children
and some of them ware single-mothers.
Also I
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Also, I
saw opposite of
this
some mother didn’t work or devote their time for
children
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the children
.
This
means that
modern role
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the modern role
of woman didn’t have
bad effect
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a bad effect
on
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on a child because
child
because even in past years the nurturing
child
was an issue. So the problem is not completely related to
society it
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society, it
is mostly related
on
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to
parent
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the parent child relationship
child
relationship.
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