The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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The role of women in modern society has changed and it is a good in some way.

For instance

, they have

same rights

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the same rights

as man; they have right to vote and work.

However

, some people believe that

this

change could increase juvenile-related problems because in past

ages women

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ages, women

ages women's

ages women's women's

role was nurturing

child

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children

a child

the child

and taking

care

house

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the house

a house

. Today woman after school or university has to find

job

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jobs

because getting support from family is not an option in many families. So, they have to work before they get married or keep working after marriage to raise a

child

and build a house because of modern financial pressure. Even in recent years women was

have

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having

to quit their jobs to devote to their time to taking

care

of their

child

. But it is not

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general rule and there is a lot of professional

child

care

facilities and nurseries. But

this

mean parents have to

spent

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spend

more money because most of

this

child

care

facilities are expensive. In

conclusion I

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conclusion, I

must say that in my life I saw many mothers who worked and take

care

of their

child

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children

and some of them ware single-mothers.

Also I

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Also, I

saw opposite of

this

some mother didn’t work or devote their time for

children

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the children

This

means that

modern role

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the modern role

of woman didn’t have

bad effect

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a bad effect

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on a child because

child

because even in past years the nurturing

child

was an issue. So the problem is not completely related to

society it

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society, it

is mostly related

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parent

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the parent child relationship

child

relationship.

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2Word repetition
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249 words

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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