It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Are family ties
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Family ties are
becoming weaker? It would be an error if we denied that family relationships are less relevant than before and
this
has been brought about by the change in our values
,
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,
lifestyles and the lack of communication among members of the family.
To begin
with, family traditions are completely different than they used to
be
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be, for
for instance
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,
twenty years ago on
Sundays families
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Sundays, families
use to gather to eat together
either it was
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either, it was
someone's birthday or not and
as a result
,
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,
the members of the families were more closely connected and enjoyed each other company needless to say that there was no internet and just a couple of things to watch on tv.
In addition
, most families used to go to the park to play with their children
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,
they had what is called quality
time
.
Secondly
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,
another important aspect that need to be mentioned is that in past years the father was responsible for making ends meet
although
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,
it was not easy the mother did not work in most cases and
therefore
, the mother used to have more communication with their children compared to these days.
To begin
to tackle
this
situation it
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situation, it
is vitally important that families try to spend the Sunday together like the old traditions even if it is for a little
time
in addition
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,
while they are having dinner it is highly important that they try to turn off
thier
of them or themselves
their
mobile phones
thus
, they will be forced to speak to each other and in
this
way their relationships will be
strengthen
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strengthened
.Only after doing
this families
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these families
this family
will be able to start to re-connect. To sum up, families surely would be closer and bolster if members of families made and effort to spend
time
together and if both parents work the few
time
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times
they spend with their children it should be completely dedicated to each other
.
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Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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