big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. do you agree or disagree.

Everyone thinks about their
payscale
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pay scale
and financial stability. Well-educated person
definitely want
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definitely wants
to
work
in a well reputed organization.Earning the handsome amount is
target
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targeted
for many individuals, but job satisfaction has its own
placa
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
place
. I
am totally disagree
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totally disagree
with the above statement that money
have
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has
more importance.
Firstly
, an individual who is working in a firm, if don't
had
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have
feeling
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the feeling
feelings
to go
on
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to
work
due to a lot of burden than money will not be the
first
priority to go office.
Secondly
, a person on high wages
also need
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also needs
motivation. Staffs feel happy, if they get the appreciation, but that company
lack
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lacks
these
denotes a person or thing
this
kind of culture than employees
doesnot show
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do not show
does not show
interest towards their employment.
Thirdly
,
work
environment that includes manager, co-workers and other staffs; they
also
play vital role in a
person
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person's
life. In an organization team
work
is
also
involved.
persons
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Persons
self-confidence increases
,
Accept space
,
if their colleagues are co-operative. To sum up, money cannot buy happiness.
Humanbeings
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Human beings
cannot survive
with
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by
being
socialize
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socialized
. The
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
involves many individuals of different natures, culture and mentalities. One
always have
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always has
a high satisfaction level, if
their
in or at that place
there
will be peace and collaboration among the staffs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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