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Some British families decide not to buy televisions because they influence the development of the creativity of children. What do you think?

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It is sometimes argued that
television
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 may exert an influence on the creativity development of children. From the perspective of brain development, I do believe that watching
television
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 will not have any negative impacts on school-age children because of
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the reasons
 presented below.
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,
television
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 can provide a great source of knowledge for children through a wide range of educational
television
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 programs. A typical example of
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 is that children can develop a deeper insight into species and their natural habitats from watching
television
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 documentaries on wildlife.
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, the integration of
television
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 into education can create a continuous learning environment for schoolchildren.
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, children can watch or even take part in
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a general knowledge competition
 on
television
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 as a way to learn through play. Admittedly,
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 would not only help children consolidate their understanding of what they have learnt in the
classroom but
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classroom, but
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 encourage critical thinking and problem solving as they are challenged to work through questions on their own.
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, it is recognized that leisure time is just as beneficial as study time from a mental health point of view. Clearly, a fair amount of time for watching
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television movies
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television, movies
 after a nerve-racking school day can help children to ease their busy mind and feel the stress melt away,
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 improving their creativity and concentration, which are linked in part to their academic performance in the
next
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 day. In conclusion, it is my belief that
television
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 has an important role to play in developing children’s creativity and should
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exist
 in every family to serve as a means of education.
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