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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the dramatic increase in population globally, a challenge faced by many big cities is insufficient land space. Governments have been providing incentives for people to relocate to regional areas.
However
, none of these seem to solve the issue of congestion. The problem lies in
employment
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employing
, as people prefer to live close to work. By encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas, lots of benefits will be achieved. Industries and businesses are the main drivers of
economy
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economic
. With their existence in regional areas, people will be attracted to move out of big cities. These people get better chances to secure jobs in a less competitive environment. As more people in rural areas get employed, their spending power increases. A chain
effect
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effect, then
then
 takes place, attracting more businesses to meet the demand in these areas. Apart from that, with industries and businesses moving out of cities, the cities become more liveable. The decrease in congestion, vehicular traffic, pollution, and competition allows city folks to live a less stressful lifestyle. On the flip side, industries and businesses may face some challenges during early stages of transition. Moving to an area with low demand will not be profitable for them.
However
, there is a way around
this
. Businesses can still have offices in cities to develop business, while relocating their plants and manufacturing facilities to regional areas. What is more, building or renting facilities in regional areas are much cheaper. All in all, the advantages of relocating industries and businesses
to
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in
 regional areas clearly outweigh any drawbacks. As long as businesses are willing to adapt, communities in big cities and regional areas will benefit from
this
 change as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regional areas
  • big cities
  • encouraging
  • industries
  • businesses
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • economic growth
  • overcrowding
  • traffic congestion
  • employment opportunities
  • balanced regional development
  • preservation of natural resources
  • quality of life
  • cultural diversity
  • lack of infrastructure
  • amenities
  • skilled workers
  • impact on the environment
  • decline in the economy
  • social and cultural challenges
  • integrating
  • new industries
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