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Band 5.5

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants. Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter remind him when and where you met tell him what kind of job you are interested in say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Jonathan, I hope
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find
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 you in pink of your health. My name is Liya and
we
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 met
last
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 month
in
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 a journey to Delhi. In
our
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 in
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the journey
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journey
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 we discussed
about
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today’s employment opportunity and you should
me
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be
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 about your business experiences. I remember that we met
on
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 cochin International Airport and you were troubled with baggage that was overweighed. I felt very
pleasure
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 about shared your legacy
to
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 me because I have only one
bags
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 with 10 kg. It's
also
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 a funny moment, we bought a low Costed bag and transferred your items to that bag. At the time of travel, you offered me a job in
UK
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 but I thankfully dressed the offer. But now I need a job. In our
Conversation
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conversation
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, I say that I have completed MBA in
hotel
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 management and worked as a team leader chef in the central plaza
hotel
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 I would like to work as a Chef in your
hotel
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 in
UK
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 because I can learn a lot of things from experienced chefs in your
hotel
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.
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, I am a great fan of European Cuisines and tried to learn some of them. If you provide me
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 opportunity to work with your team , I feel more thankful to you. I attached my resume with
this
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 letter and please consider me when you invite
professional
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 to your business. I am looking forward
for
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 your
replay
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 as soon as possible . Yours faithfully, Mary Liya

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chain of restaurants
  • potential job opportunity
  • relevant experience
  • managerial role
  • customer service
  • qualifications
  • certifications
  • unique skills
  • eagerness
  • admiration
  • resume
  • references
  • face-to-face meeting
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