Improvements in health,education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations.However,the governments of nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

Today's world has been
devided
separated into parts or pieces
divided
into developing and industrialised countries which the main difference between them is the amount of money that
government
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governments
the government
apply in important sectors
such
as
education
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,
health
and commerce. Most of the poorer nations are buried
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at
depts
the extent downward or backward or inward
depths
debts
debates
as a
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result of
their unbalanced
finances which
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finances, which
are
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reflected
in a failed
health
carean
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care an
unstructured
education
system and weak international trade.
This
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vicious cycle
will continue indefinitely unless
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other
wealthier
weather
nations show interest in minimizing the worldwide economic differences
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as well as taking more responsibility for assisting less fortunate countries. Most of the African countries live in sub-human conditions because of the extreme poverty
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,
upheaval
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hunger
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disease
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unemployment
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,
lack of
education
and both inexperienced and corrupt administrations.The
devastationg
making light of
devastating
consequences of the AIDS epidemic in those countries could improve if the infected population were to
recive
get something; come into possession of
receive
free drugs to control the disease
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have access to
health
professionals and get information on how to prevent its spread.But
this
can only be
achived
to gain with effort
achieved
through international help programs in which leaders of the world's richest countries donate medicine and
also
send and nurses to treat and educate those in need.
Moreover
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most of the poor countries rely on selling agriculture products and raw materials to rich nations and buying industrialized products from them resulting in a huge financial deficit.
Consequently
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they borrow a significant amount of money from the World Bank to try to improve their broken economies, but
sometomes
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
the money disappears with no significant changes and they cannot even pay the interest to the bank
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,
decided to forgive billions of dollars' worth if
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the debt
debt
owed by the world's poorest nations.
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they developed adequate loan programs to financially assist those countries. In conclusion
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the leaders
of the industrialised countries play an indispensable role in assisting developing nations in dealing with
essentail
absolutely necessary; vitally necessary
essential
areas
such
as
health
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,
education
and trade.
Also
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their aid is the key to breaking the vicious cycle
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which results in poverty and death.
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