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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not buy the items listed. • Say what you would like the bank to do to fix the problem.

#credit #card #bank #lists #purchases #manager #items
Dear Sir or Madam,
This
 is in
regards
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 to the faulty
credit
card
statement
 that I received
your
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from your
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 bank today. My name is Sunaina Khanna and I have been using
hdfc
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credit
card
 services
from
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for
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past
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 1 year.My
credit
card
id
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ID
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 is "sunaina.khanna" and
credit
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my credit
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card
 number is CNFPK000007878.
Although
 my contact details are mentioned in the portal,
but
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 I would still like to mention my telephone number
incase
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in case
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 needed.It is 7878990033. The
statement
 that I received is completely faulty and it has put me
in
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under
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 a lot of stress.The
statement
 mentions that I have purchased a diamond ring worth Rs. 1 lakh and a
rolex
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Rolex
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 watch worth Rs. 2
lakhs
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, and the bill mentioned on
this
statement
 is 3,15,000 INR. I can confirm
you
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that I have only spent 15000 rs.
this
 month through the
credit
card
 and I am completely shocked by the rest of the purchases mentioned in the
statement
. I would like you to look into the matter and check if it is a fraud or a mistake from the bank's end.I want the bank to send me the correct
credit
card
statement
 for
this
 month and
releave
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release
relieve
 me from
this
 irrelevant stress. I am expecting an immediate response and a very quick resolution to
this
 issue. Thanks and Regards, Sunaina Khanna
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coherence cohesion
The statement could include a clear link between each paragraph and the following paragraph.
task achievement
The context could be introduced in a more indirect tone, being polite and showing some restrain in the language used.

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