Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent years, the debate surrounding how to decide a career has been highly discussed. Many believe that the
enjoyability
lack of ability (especially mental ability) to do something
inability
of the
job
should be prioritised, whilst others believe that a better salary is the definition of a better future. Both views will be discussed before an opinion is reached. In order to survive in the current world, it is necessary that people have an adequate amount of money. When a person does not prioritise their income, they will often find themselves in financial trouble.
For example
, people who enjoy working as teachers often complain about the low pay and longer hours.
Although
, they are doing what they enjoy, they cannot ignore the increasing
fiancial
involving financial matters
financial
stress which
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stress, which
leads to disastrous effects on
ones
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one's
mental health.
However
, if they had chosen a
job
based on their
salary
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salary, then
then
they would not be going through these rough patches. By finding a
job
, you have defined the path you have for your own future. By pursuing a career in something you like, it means that you will never have any regrets and continue to love what you do for the years to come. To illustrate, often it is found that people who pursue a career in something they love have no regrets and have a better outlook in life
in contrast
to those who are dictated by money.
This
results in a well balanced life and better mental health which
is
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will be
very important in the future. In conclusion,
although
a higher paying
job
would lead to a more luxurious
job
, I believe it is essential to
love
go away from a place
leave
your profession as it plays an important part in your mental well being.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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