In many countries traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
era of technology and globalization, all spheres of life have changed dramatically and
food
is
also
no exception. I agree that international fast foods and restaurants have eaten up traditional foods and cuisines and
this
has had a detrimental effect on families and societies. A number of arguments surround my opinion. There are a lot of detrimental effects on families.
Firstly in
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Firstly, in
this
torrid pace of life, people are working till their death. They have no time to prepare and enjoy traditional home cooked
food
. Ultimately, they switch to an easy option of restaurants. McDonald's
have become
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has become
a ubiquitous term in every home.
Secondly
, there is the influence of occidental
culture
over the oriental one. People are forgetting their roots.
For example
, in earlier times all family members used to sit together and eat, and over the dining table, they shared
their happenings of the
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the happenings of their
day. These fast foods are eaten
alone mostly
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alone, mostly
because they don’t appeal to the palate of the older members.
As a result
, family bonds and relationships are getting vague.
Moreover
, the art of home cooking is suffering a lot. Admittedly,
this
trend has harmful effects on individuals. Undoubtedly, people are affected by
health hazards
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the health hazards
like obesity and other diseases. Obesity is the root cause of many other diseases. Fast foods are rich in fats and salts which are not good for health. An obese
personis are
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person is
person is are
more likely to suffer from diseases like hypertension and diabetes. There are tangible consequences on society too. Broadly speaking, as people get inclined towards fast
food
and restaurants, local
culture
dies out. It is because traditional
food
is inextricably linked with
culture
. Undoubtedly, the identity of the society and nation will disappear. It will be monopolized by western societies.
Also
, if people are not healthy, the productivity of the nation will come to a standstill.
Last
but not least, fast foods promote use-and-throw
culture
which adds to the problem of garbage dumps, contamination, pollution and eventually many diseases. To put
into
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in
nutshell
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a nutshell
, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that international fast foods have carved their niche and traditional
food
has taken the
backseat
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back seat
. Certainly,
this
has adverse effects on individuals, families and societies.

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