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Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

#countries #money #bicycle #usage #traffic #congestion
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Before the invention of motor vehicles, there was only
one
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 mode to
commute which
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commute, which
 we call it as
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bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
. It was invented back in
19th century
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the 19th century
 by a
german
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German
 civilian named Baron Carl. It took not long enough to invent motor vehicles or say cars. Since
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 people are more
facinated
having your attention fixated as though by a spell
fascinated
 about motor vehicle not just because it is faster but
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 because it is more comfortable and needs less struggle to operate. As the time passed, the advancement took place
one
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 after the other and
bicycle
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 was taken over by cars. People now-a-days try to use it more and more to almost everything
for example
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 going to
trips
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trip
 or to get groceries. There is no limit
for
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to
 it. Today, we are so comfortable about it that everyone owns, which is now increasing the traffic and
pollution
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.
Government organization
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A government organization
 of some countries
are spending
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is spending
 money extravagantly on promoting the usage of
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bicycle
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the bicycle
bicycles
a bicycle
 over motorized
one
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 because they are facing multiple
challanges
take exception to
challenges
 like
pollution
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, traffic, fuel import and etc. Countries
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 as Germany, Finland and china are among top 10 countries who has taken
these initiative
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this initiative
these initiatives
 and have shown remarkable results. It is the best solution
for
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to
 traffic congestion and
pollution
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. Traffic congestion in these countries
are
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is
 tremendously low because of
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 steps.
This
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 mode has
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 proven that not just they are
economic
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economically
 but
also
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 healthy for
environment
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the environment
 and human beings. It
produce
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produces
is produced
 zero
pollution
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 and keeps
one
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 healthy as it boost the metabolism decreases stress level and many more to
go but
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go, but
 the major question is that, is it really that crucial to use it now? In my opinion,
yes it
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yes, it
 is important to start using
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bicycle
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bicycles
 as much as possible because we as human are utilizing natural resources so recklessly that the day is not far enough when we will be out of those resources and due to
pollution
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 the nature will
also
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 stop regenerating and which will
left
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leave
 nothing but a
waste land
an uninhabited wilderness that is worthless for cultivation
wasteland
 for our
next
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 generation.
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