Woman and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender.

Nowadays, as having radically different strengths and weaknesses based on mentality and physicality, women and men have been facing a wide range of quandaries to be
exclude
Suggestion
excluded
from particular professions. From my perspective, it should be equal to give both genders the same opportunities at
work
and in life generally.
To begin
with, in our modern life, male and female are educated in the same educational programs. In the past, women were not given a
properly
Suggestion
proper
academic education and supposed to do household tasks only because men were believed to perform better at
work
and school. Nowadays, our society has triggered far-reaching developments in an eclectic mix of aspects ranging from business, health care to education and through that
women
Suggestion
woman
has been given
Suggestion
have been given
the same chances to be educated academically.
As a result
, females are able to meet all expectations at
work
as their qualities they get are not different from what men have.
Secondly
, we are all humans and we need to be equal. Recently, there have been lots of movements which fight for
women
Suggestion
women's
rights and many events where they ask for feminism
such
as Miss Universe, these things all aim to reject the mindset of “man is the best”. Even it is undeniable that men have better physical strength, discrimination against women should not be considered based on
this
aspect. Whether at
work
or in
house
Suggestion
the house
, both genders should be given the same opportunities, salaries,
work
tasks and so on. To sum up, women and men need to be judged by their knowledge and performance not by their genders. If we are able to give others equality, the world will be a better place where negativity could not grow and
foster
more quickly
faster
, everyone will have a smile on their faces.

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