Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days,
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distinctive subjects like maths,
science
, arts,
History
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,
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which context is
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importance in
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world. In my
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, being
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in
science
and technology ought to be more
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beneficial
in
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world On
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hand, It is
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, that in compersion to
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subject
history
render the knowladge aboutv role played by
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ancestors
;
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, plays a vital role in ones life, as one can learn alot from the past ecperiences.
History
, is a most significant
school
subject
,
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about the past devasting life incidents.
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educated
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about these crucial situations, so they will
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of the
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consequences and
hopefully avoid any situations in the future.
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,
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skills and
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of
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can be used for the same, rather than past evidence as a
school
subject
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other
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hand, few
people
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our future can be made superior only with the help of
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and
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technology
.
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should
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as the
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most
important
subject
in
school
because
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it
helps to
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with modern Robotics and revoluation, As, a major
subject
it will generate skillfull and expert students
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the field of
Science
and Technology in future.
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,
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things
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decades ago is now available at our
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Communication is one of the best
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of advancements in Automation. In earlier days, on required numerous days to convey a message to someone,
whereas
people
are now just a phone call away.
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concur that
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is gone and we cannot improvise it by any chance. So. we must
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to
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devloped
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develop
developed
new Invention in
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and
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technology
. So
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Science
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important
school
curriculm
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curriculum
rather than
History
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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