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Human activities have had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that it cannot be changed, while other believes action can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Humans are completely responsible for the adverse effect on forests and animals globally. Some people believe that it cannot be recoverable while the majority of the people are confident about the positive change, if we took corrective action in
order
 to preserve the plants and animal species. In my opinion, it is 100 percentages possible that we can bring back change with
positive approach
Suggestion
a positive approach
 towards nature.
De-forestation
Suggestion
Deforestation
 and
demonization
to represent as diabolically evil
demonisation
 of plants are occurred due to un-stoppable human needs from forests and wildlife. Some people consider that we cannot recover which is already demolished in terms of
rarer
Suggestion
rare
 species of plants and animals because it is simply controlled by nature.
This
 example illustrates effectively, from 1999 to 2015 in Madagascar 500,000 hectors of the forest is cut down for human needs
such
 as a land requirement for agriculture, building
new homes etc.
Suggestion
new homes, etc.
 These are some of the
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 why we cannot recover
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
rear
not widely known; especially valued for its uncommonness
rare
 plants and animals which is already diminished decades ago.
On the other hand
, the majority of people believe that we can preserve
natural wealth
Suggestion
the natural wealth
 we have it now if we took positive steps against deforestation and other responsible threats. All the Government authorities should make a strict law and follow properly in
order
 to stop these activities around the world. The people need to understand the importance of natural wealth we received as a gift from mother earth.
For instance
, in Madagascar schools and college teens took a leap forward in
order
 to preserve jungles and animals. They have started to
replantation
 and convincing people why we still need
this
 wildlife and forests in
order
 to balance life on earth. In conclusion, the plant and animal species which we already lost are not recoverable in certain cases.
However in
Accept comma addition
However, in
 my opinion, with proper actions and teaching people about the importance of natural wealth, we can save nature to save human-beings.  
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