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When recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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Some people believe that employers of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 should focus more on the personal qualities of
job
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 seekers, at the expense of how qualified or experienced these applicants are. In my view, I consider that considerations should be more on the qualifications and experience of
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 applicants as
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 would help curb the problem of false
pretense
the act of giving a false appearance
pretences
pretence
proteins
 and help to recruit skilled and knowledgeable professionals. Employers should attach more importance to how qualified and experienced
job
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 seekers are rather than personal attributes because,
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 would help overcome the issue of pretence on the part of applicants.
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, a new recruit that pretends
to be
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be
 punctual at
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at
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on
 the initial stage of his or her
work
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 engagement may eventually begin to arrive late to
work
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.
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,
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behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 would make the
company
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 suffer from a backlog of
work
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 that are unattended to and can dampen the integrity and reputation of the
company
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. Another salient reason why
job
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 hirers should consider employing qualified and experienced people is that, skilled and knowledgeable employees would be recruited.
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, hiring qualified and experienced people means that, employees with high intellectual prowess would be at the helm of affairs in an organization.
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,
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 would lead to increased productivity on the part of
workers which
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workers, which
 translates
to
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into
 more profit for employers and the
company
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 in general. In conclusion, I believe that recruiting more qualified and experienced people, rather than focusing on their personal qualities, would not only curb the issue of character camouflage, but
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 lead to having
skilled and knowledgeable group
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a skilled and knowledgeable group
 of employees handling the
company
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's affairs.
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