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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situarion? How to improve it?

#people #behaviour #lack #respect #situarion
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Most of the people's argue that anti-social
behaviour
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 is increasing day by day and people become disrespectful to others. The primary cause of
this
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 phenomenon is the structure of family and
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internet
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the internet
.
the
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The
 most viable solution is to educate their young about
this
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 issue. Many people are living in loneliness and bow families are not nuclear.
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Because
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 of too much pressure of work parents do not have enough time to check their
children
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children's
 activities or talk to them. So, youngsters and teenage spend their most of the time on
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internet
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the internet
 and social media they don't have any real communication.
they
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They
talk rarely
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rarely talk
 to others they only messaging.
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, In their loneliness, they start consuming drugs and alcohol which contribute anti-social
behaviour
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. Even, if someone tries to advise
them
people in general
they
then
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 show very less respect towards them.
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, A local survey carried out by welfare society reveals that 96% working parents feel that their kids are having anti social
behaviour
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 habits. A long term solution to
this
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 predicament is to educate younger about the dangers of overusing the
internet
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, less interacting with others and consuming more drugs.
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, children in schools could be taught how to behave politely with others as well as parents should spare some time with their children and talk to them share with them
there
of them or themselves
their
 experiences and tell them about right and wrong
.
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.
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, school children in Germany are taught about the consequences of Bad
behaviour
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 and overusing
of
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on
 the
internet
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 which results kids start sitting in groups and there is a notable increase in
behaviour
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 politeness. To conclude, people start behaving in Bad manners due to lack of basic
upbring
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.
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so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
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,
the children must be taught that good
behaviour
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 and respect for others is the only key to live
better life
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a better life
better lives
.
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