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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situarion? How to improve it?

#people #behaviour #lack #respect #situarion
Most of the people's argue that anti-social
behaviour
 is increasing day by day and people become disrespectful to others. The primary cause of
this
 phenomenon is the structure of family and
internet
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the internet
.
the
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The
 most viable solution is to educate their young about
this
 issue. Many people are living in loneliness and bow families are not nuclear.
becouse
Suggestion
Because
Becouse
 of too much pressure of work parents do not have enough time to check their
children
Suggestion
children's
 activities or talk to them. So, youngsters and teenage spend their most of the time on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 and social media they don't have any real communication.
they
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They
talk rarely
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rarely talk
 to others they only messaging.
Furthermore
, In their loneliness, they start consuming drugs and alcohol which contribute anti-social
behaviour
. Even, if someone tries to advise
them
people in general
they
then
 show very less respect towards them.
For example
, A local survey carried out by welfare society reveals that 96% working parents feel that their kids are having anti social
behaviour
 habits. A long term solution to
this
 predicament is to educate younger about the dangers of overusing the
internet
, less interacting with others and consuming more drugs.
Moreover
, children in schools could be taught how to behave politely with others as well as parents should spare some time with their children and talk to them share with them
there
of them or themselves
their
 experiences and tell them about right and wrong
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, school children in Germany are taught about the consequences of Bad
behaviour
 and overusing
of
Suggestion
on
 the
internet
 which results kids start sitting in groups and there is a notable increase in
behaviour
 politeness. To conclude, people start behaving in Bad manners due to lack of basic
upbring
.
Accept space
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
,
Accept space
,
the children must be taught that good
behaviour
 and respect for others is the only key to live
better life
Suggestion
a better life
better lives
.
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