Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Social media today play a main role in

severals

(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many

several

aspects of our life. They are used by people of different ages in different way. But sometimes they are used without any kinds of limits and

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can

creade

make or cause to be or to become

create

spread

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serious problems

serious problem

a serious problem

of privacy leaks.

Nowdays

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Nowadays

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(of actions or states) slightly short of or not quite accomplished; all but

almost

all actions we perform online involve social media.

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general info about a person

to

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with

different way

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different ways

a different way

to organise a party.

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example social

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example, social

media are used in fields like politics, marketing and communication. But if social media help to keep in contact with people far from us, or help us to keep update about

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the achievements

achievements

achievement

of a

friends

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friend

of ours, they have

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different risks.

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Obviously

social media play a main role in social interactions.

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is a very good aspect. They can help people from two

oppsite

being directly across from each other; facing

opposite

parts of the world to keep in contact and to

share

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moments or important

achivements

the action of accomplishing something

achievements

achievement

of their life with a

goup

any number of entities (members) considered as a unit

group

of close friends. If in the past, a letter need long periods to be delivered, today with social media is very easy to

share

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a photo, or send a message to someone. Everyone can use them without any kind of problems.

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people can get

beneifts

financial assistance in time of need

benefits

benefit

from them, so they could not feel alone from their family.

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, social media are very dangerous. Everyone should know the risks to use them without any kind of rules.

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example with

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example, with

social media, every could get in contact with the wrong

persone

a human being

person

persons

.

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example is when people

share

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every single

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aspect

aspects

of their

life not

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life, not

only with their close friends but

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with other people.

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, social media make people addicted to them. People sometime lose their mind to

share

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, to like and to

riceve

get something; come into possession of

receive

like. In fact,

their

in or at that place

there

are not able anymore to enjoy the moment, because

thery

people in general

they

spend all their time on the social media. I

belive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

social media are an important revolution. They have a lot of good aspects, but like weapon everyone should know how to use them without the risk to

hust

raise or haul up with or as if with mechanical help

hoist

host

just

themselfs

reflexive form of "them"

themselves

or someone else.