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Fossil fules(eg coal,oil and natural gas) are the main source of energy in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy(eg solar and wind) is encouraged. To what extent is this positive or negative ?

Renewable sources of
energy
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 like solar and wind have taken over the main
energy
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 sources like coal
,
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oil and natural gas used in several countries. Solar
energy
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innovation
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 is now being promoted for increased usage in various places across the country.
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 essay discusses the contentious argument regarding its merits and demerits. Fossil fuels used in the form of
coal oil
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coal, oil
 and natural gas
is rampantly used
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are rampantly used
 everywhere because of its easy availability and cheaper price. The U.S government has made
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 source of
energy
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reacheable
easily approached
reachable
 to common people at a subsidized rate, including the tax which
also
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 gets decreased. Whether people are travelling at 3 am or 3 pm, what matters is their gas tanks are filled with fuel. The major drawback with fossil fuels is that it needs ground
drilling which
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drilling, which
 is causing water pollution. Not only that, people should not forget about the
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
 gas emission.
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, with constant usage, there will be scarcity of
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 resource in the near future. Considering the modern
innovation
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 of the solar
technology
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, the impact is mostly beneficial. The
energy
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 source is renewable and with the improvement in
technology
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,
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 the cost will
also
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 decrease as there will be no scarcity of
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 resource in the days to come. All the more
,
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it is unaware to cause any sorts of pollution with the solar plant installation on the roof surface which can be easily accessed anytime. The only negative aspect is that it has still not been universally accepted because the cost is alarming with the
photovoltaics
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technology
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. Since it is a new
innovation
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,
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 requires some time for people to adjust. To conclude, there are pros and cons both with the renewable source of
energy
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 and the fossil fuel.
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,
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 looking into the future, solar
energy
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 is much more promising due to its new
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innovation
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innovative
technology
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.

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