Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think it is government responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption, while others think it is an individual's responsibility to limit the amount of suger they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The effects of long term
sugar
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consumption
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and its potential consequences are well known and studied. Among the most common
illnessess
impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism
illnesses
illness
associated with increased
sugar
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intake are obesity, diabetes, high blood
pressue
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
and congestive heart failure.
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the
devistating
making light of
devastating
effects these conditions have on the
individul
a human being
individual
, the yearly expenditure the health system spend treating these conditions is enormous. As a
consequences there
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consequence, there
consequence there
is a growing debate on whether or not
sugar
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consumption
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should be limited and
who's
of which person?
whose
responsibility is it to do so. On one hand, many people believe that the
government
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can and should be responsible for preventing increased
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intake.
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is because
thay
people in general
they
that
have the ability to create drastic and instant changes in the food industry.
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, through legislation the
government
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can prohibit the marketing of products with high
suger
a white crystalline carbohydrate used as a sweetener and preservative
sugar
content
such
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as candies, morning
cerials
in regular succession without gaps
serials
cereals
cries
and cakes.
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, the
government
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can
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the type and quality of food given in
scools
an educational institution
schools
. By changing the lunch time snack from a candy to an apple, daily
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consumption
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can decrease substantially.
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, other people believe that
diminshing
becoming smaller or less or appearing to do so
diminishing
dimension
sugar
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intake is the individual's responsibility and the
government
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should not interfere with the food industry. According to
this
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beliefe
any cognitive content held as true
belief
, every person is entitled of its own body and if he
want
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wants
to have a snack it is
he's
male possessive pronoun
his
personal decision.
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, some people
truely
in accordance with truth or fact or reality
truly
believe that preventing us from
having a certain types of foods violate
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violate a certain types of foods
has a certain types of foods violated
were a certain types of foods violating
having a certain types of foods violate
our basic human rights of
freedome
the condition of being free; the power to act or speak or think without externally imposed restraints
freedom
. In my opinion,
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should be limited mostly through state legislation.
Sugar
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, as been shown in many publications, is highly addictive and
as a result
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the
government
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should address it as
such
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. Just like it prevent's the
consumption
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of cocaine and hallucinogens, it should limit the use of
sugar
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. More so, the
government
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should educate children from a very young age on the importance of a balanced diet and daily activities. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I believe
sugar
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should be addressed as an addictive substance and its
consumption
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should be highly regulated. It is the only way we will be able to fight it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excessive consumption
  • public health
  • regulate
  • sugar content
  • food labeling
  • sugar tax
  • nutritional information
  • educate
  • personal responsibility
  • autonomy
  • freedom of choice
  • informed choices
  • health campaigns
  • dietary habits
  • well-being
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