Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

Many people
tradiotionaly
according to tradition; in a traditional manner
traditionally
considered man and women to be
fundametaly
in essence; at bottom or by one's (or its) very nature
fundamentally
different in regards to their strengths and
weaknessess
a flaw or weak point
weaknesses
weakness
. While man
were considered
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was considered
physically and
mentaly
in your mind
mentally
superior, woman were thought to be artistic, patient and calculated. Based on
this
false concept, vacancies have been traditionally occupied by specific
gender
. As an example, being a taxi driver or a barman was considered to be a man's job, while being a teacher was
considred
carefully weighed
considered
more suitable for
female
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a female
.
This
beliefe
any cognitive content held as true
belief
, in my opinion, is completely wrong. There is no room today for excluding anyone, regardless of their
gender social
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gender, social
or
finicial
involving financial matters
financial
finical
background, from applying and getting a certain position. By doing
so we
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so, we
prevent a fundamental human right- the right
for
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to
equal
apportunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
. People should be evaluated based on their individual capabilities and
ambishion
a cherished desire
ambitions
. In both genders we can find qualified and suitable people for the required position, regardless of its requirement. Examples
to
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of
this
paradigm shift can be seen today when both genders serve in the army as
airforce
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air force
pilots or troop soldiers.
Similarly
, both men and women work today as teachers or fashion designers, fields which were previously thought to be
sutable
meant or adapted for an occasion or use
suitable
stable
for
female
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females
a female
. In conclusion, the concept of excluding a person based on
he's
male possessive pronoun
his
gender
should be
complete;y
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
abolished. Every Person should be evaluated based on
hes
male possessive pronoun
his
capabilities and
ambshion
a cherished desire
ambition
ambitions
and not on
gender
.
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