It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Lots of scientists believe that our manner of was built from the birthday to six.

Therefore

, it should be learnt to investigate of right and wrong in early age and admiring or

punishment

play a significant role. In

this

essay the extent and sort of

punishment

will be discussed.

First

of all, it is important to know that encouraging children help them more

in contrast

with giving them

penalty

Suggestion

a penalty

. The point is that,

punishment

rarely works

more effective

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more effectively

For instance

, children who have no idea about the electricity can be punished while they insist on playing with the plugs. In

this

case

punishement

the act of punishing

punishment

works but

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works, but

for social behaviour

such

greeting or

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greeting, or

using dirty words, encouraging will affect better.

Secondly

, it is two sorts of

punishment

, physical and emotional.

Although

, physical penalties may be

easier

Suggestion

the easiest

way to

acheive

to gain with effort

achieve

goal

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a goal

the goal

goals

, but the result lasts for a little period. It is believed that emotional

punishment not

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punishment, not

only do respond

better but

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better, but

also

, remembers for longer time. The point should be noticed is that, the time and the way of parents and teachers react to the behaviour.

Thus

, it is better to use emotional punishments while the situation is understood. In conclusion, it is important to encourage children more than punishing them.

Suggestion

some

ocassions

something you have to do

occasions

locations

occasion

emotional

punishment

considering the time and the

mean

the force of workers available

men

of action, will be more effective and helpful than admiring.

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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