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These days more and more people are going to other counties for significant period of time either to find a job or study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Moving to a new
country
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 has always been
fascinating experience
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a fascinating experience
.
Nowadays with
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Nowadays, with
 increasing opportunities more and more people are moving abroad whether for employment or for higher studies. With having benefits of moving to a new
country
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one
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 has to face a number of hurdles as well as it
is says
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says
is said
 things come in packages. The
first
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 & foremost benefit of moving to a new
country
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 is
comparative benefit
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a comparative benefit
one
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 will receive particularly when you are arriving in a
third
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 world
country
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 from a developing
one
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. These benefits will give you an
ease
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easy
,
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 will make you feel more secure about your future. Benefits
such
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 as Health is
fantabulous
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 in
western world
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the western world
, education is almost free till high school,
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such
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 facilities gives equal right to individuals, which every
country
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 cannot afford to do.
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 people can afford to have their basic rights very easily.
On
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In
By
 contrast to avail these benefits
one
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 has to make
adaptable
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adaptations
 to
new culture
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new cultures
 and should learn to respect diversity rather than getting judgmental. There
is
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are
have been
 always a lot of cultural and moral differences among nations, despite that
one
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 can easily adjust itself, if it starts accepting others cultures by making new friends
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 those who are aboriginals.
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, homesickness is another hindrance which can
also
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 be resolved to
great extent
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a great extent
, if
one
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 stays in touch with loved ones with the help of
latest gadgets
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the latest gadgets
. In conclusion, there are numerous benefits of moving to a new
country
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, if
one
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 is able to adapt to the changes and positivity accept them.
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Further it’s
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Further, it’s
 not always about adopting others, but
one
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 can
also
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 share their own
good
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best
 values. As now the world being global village is full of diversified culture where people exchange a number of values among them.
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